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Dear Kelly,
What' up! I haven't seen you for a long time,
and I miss you very much. Last time, you told me that you have
transferred to another school. How is your new school life? I guess
you have made lots of friends as you are such an enchanting girl. You
have moved to
Canada for five years. Did you improve your English? You
have an opportunity to talk with foreigners, so
try to open your mouth and speak louder so that
your English will be better.
Since I was in the 12th grade, I have a lot
of homework to do every day. I am gonna crazy.
The pressure upon us is very heavy, but we have no choice because everyone
counts us to enter an ideal college. Anyway,
next summer vacation-after we take the JCEE,
come back to Taiwan and let's have a wonderful
vacation. We can travel around Taiwan and go anywhere we want to. I
have to finish the letter. Keep in touch.
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Dear Kelly,
What's up! I haven't seen you for a long time,
and I miss you very much. Last time, you told me that you had
transferred to another school. How is your new school life? I guess
you have made lots of friends, as you are such an enchanting girl. You
have been in Canada for five years. Did you
improve your English? Since you have had an
opportunity to talk with foreigners, try to
open your mouth and speak louder, so that
your English will be better.
Since I am in the 12th grade, I have a lot
of homework to do every day. I am going crazy.
The pressure upon us is very heavy, but we have no choice because everyone
counts on us to enter an ideal college. Anyway,
next summer vacation after we take the JCEE,
come back to Taiwan and we'll have a wonderful
vacation. We can travel around Taiwan and go anywhere we want to. I
have to finish the letter. Keep in touch.
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Dear Sherry,
Thanks for your pretty scarf, which I had
wanted to buy for a long time. I am so glad that I can get this special
present for Christmas. Although I haven't visited you for a long time,
you still remember me, your little niece. This green scarf is warm and
beautiful with many twinkling stars. It's so cute that I can't go out
without wearing it. Needless to say, when I went to school, I got a
lot of appreciation from my teachers and
classmates. I promise you that I will treasure this scarf forever. At
last, I wish I can see you soon so
that I can let you see
me with this lovely green scarf.
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Dear Sherry,
Thanks for the pretty scarf, which I had wanted
to buy for a long time. I am so glad that I can get this special present
for Christmas. Although I haven't visited you for a long time, you still
remember me, your little niece. This green scarf is warm and beautiful
with many twinkling stars. It's so cute that I can't go out without
wearing it. Needless to say, when I went to school, I got a lot of attention
from my teachers and classmates. I promise you that I will treasure
this scarf forever. I hope I can see you soon,
so that you can see me with this lovely
green scarf.
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Dear Stephen,
You have done a good
job in that game while dealing with Allen
Iverson. How long haven't been to Taiwan?
I remember that last time you came to Taiwan with joy,
and you bought a lot of souvenirs, especially peculiar ornaments.
Unfortunately, a week was not long enough for you to visit all the spots.
This time, I hope that you can stay in Taiwan longer so that I will
be able to show you more spectacular buildings and beautiful scenery.
Moreover, you will find how sweet Taiwanese girls are! Anyway, you have
to wait till the NBA season is off. Let's keep in touch.
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Dear Stephen,
You did a great
job against Allen Iverson in
that game. When was the last time you were
in Taiwan? I remember last time you came to Taiwan with Joy.
You bought a lot of souvenirs, especially
peculiar ornaments. Unfortunately, a week was not long enough for you
to visit all the spots. This time, I hope that you can stay in Taiwan
longer, so that I will be able to show you more spectacular buildings
and beautiful scenery. Moreover, you will find how sweet Taiwanese girls
are! Anyway, you have to wait till the NBA season is off. Let's keep
in touch.
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Dear Dad and Mom,
This is my last year in college. I want to be a teacher after graduating
from college. Maybe you don't like my decision because you ever
told that you wanted me to be a doctor. However,
I prefer to teach students rather than save lives. I have considered
it for a long time. The major reason for me to make such a decision
is that I find the education in Taiwan goes from
bad to worse. I want to devote myself to improving it. Whether
you agree or not, this is my life and I want to have more control over
it. I sincerely hope that you will stand for
me. After all, you are my dear parents and I don't want to let you feel
disappointed. I will love you forever.
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Dear Dad and Mom,
This is my last year in college. I want to be a teacher after graduating
from college. Maybe you don't like my decision because you told
me that you wanted me to be a doctor. However, I prefer to teach
students rather than save lives. I have considered it for a long time.
The major reason for me to make such a decision is that I find the education
in Taiwan is getting worse and worse. I want
to devote myself to improving it. Whether you agree or not, this is
my life and I want to have more control over it. I sincerely hope that
you will stand by me. After all, you are my
dear parents and I don't want to let you feel disappointed. I will love
you forever.
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Dec. 22, 1999
Dear Yuan- kae,
How are you getting along at school? We haven't seen each other since
we graduated from junior high school. My schoolwork has been heavy;
therefore, I spend a lot of time in the cram school. However, I still
make some time to take part in extra-curricular activities. My school
authorities expect that students not only do well in their studies but
also cultivate good hobbies. So, our school offers various and interesting
clubs, such as basketball club, volleyball club, and chorus. Because
I take delight in playing basketball, I join the basketball club. The
activities held by the club add spice to my daily life and help relieve
my pressure from the schoolwork. How about your school life? Is it the
same as mine? Write to me as soon as possible.
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Nov. 4, 1999
Dear Gary,
I do want to apologize to you.
We haven't talked to each other for two months since we had an argument.
I know I should not have criticized the girl you love. I should not
have said she was ugly and stupid. It never occurred to me that you
would yell at me and turn to leave immediately. It made me angry and
I decided not to talk to you.
At first, I thought it was all your fault. Before long, you would apologize
to me as you always did and then we would be reconciled. But as time
went by, I calmed down and reflected on what I had done to you. I found
I was too reckless to care about your feelings. Even though I had something
to say, I should have expressed myself in a mild and tactful way. I
know I was wrong. I would like to ask for your forgiveness. After all,
a true friend is uneasy to find. I don't want to lose a good friend
like you. We should cherish our friendship and try our best to keep
it, right? If your answer is "Yes", please give me a smile and say "Hi"
next time you see me.
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