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Jason is a fat and ugly man. One day Jason's friend introduce Jason to a pretty woman, Nina. Jason fell in love with Nina at first sight. Then Jason almost phoned Nina and invited her to go out everyday. Nina felt Jason was so annoying and finally Nina couldn't help but pretend to be not at home to get away with him. This made Jason so sad. At this time his friend laugh at him and he was so recalcitrant. Thus they wagered if Jason could make Nina be his girlfriend. In order to win, Jason called Nina every day. One time Jason phoned the wrong number and it's midnight that time. The old man scold at Jason very angrily. But Jason didn't give up. He did really liked Nina and he was not reconciled. After a long period of time, Jason's friend knew that Nina didn't answer Jason from beginning to end. He went to Jason's house and wanted to laugh at him. But Jason didn't admire that he lost. Therefore, they decided to phone Nina the last time to judge if Jason lost. Fortunately, Nina answered it this time. This made Jason and his friend surprised. When Nina found it's Jason, Nina left the phone off the hook. Jason was so disappointed, but he lied to his friend. He said, " She says she loves me." In spite of this friend doubted him but he still paid money to Jason. Although Jason didn't have a girlfriend, But at least, he gained the money.

Jason is a fat and ugly man. One day Jason's friend introduced him to a pretty woman, Nina. Jason fell in love with Nina at the first sight. Then Jason phoned Nina and invited her to go out almost every day. Nina found Jason was so annoying that she couldn't help but pretend not to be at home to get away from him. This made Jason so sad. At this time his friend laughed at him, calling him a loser. Jason was very angry. He bet his friend a large sum of money that he could win Nina's love. In order to win, Jason called Nina every day. One day, it was midnight and Jason had a wrong number. The old man who answered the phone shouted at Jason very angrily. However, Jason didn't give up. He really liked Nina. Several months later, Jason's friend knew that Nina didn't repay Jason's love to her. He went to Jason's house and wanted to ask for the money. But Jason didn't admit that he lost the bet. Therefore, they decided to call Nina the last time to see who was the winner. Fortunately, Nina answered it and this made Jason and his friend surprised. When Nina found it was Jason again, she hung up the phone immediately. Jason was so disappointed but he still lied to his friend. He said," She said she loved me." Although his friend doubted Jason, he still paid the money to him. Jason didn't win a girlfriend, but at least he gained the money.

Jason is a big bank's chairman who has a handsome face. He is very conceited man, so most people dosen't like him. He is deeply attracted by a miss, called Nina. One day in the bank, " Nina, I love you so much. Could I invite you to see a movie?" "No! Never the ever," Nina says. Nina doesn't like him, but Jason doesn't give up. From then on, Jason calls her every day, so that Nina is getting more and more angry. After a month, Jason leaves a message on the answering machine and on her voice mail for her again, but Nina still doesn't call back to her. Jason still doesn't give up, he has an idea that he can try her mobile phone. But he doesn't know her cell phone number. Fortunately, one of his coworker tells him to look up on the phone book. "Ring! Ring!" The phone is ringing. When Nina listens Jason's voice, she is very angry and turns off her phone. Jason looks up her room's phone number on the phone book again. First time he gets a wrong number, second time, he gets a right one. He is very happy. "Hi! Nina." Soon the phone is cutted by Nina. In the other hand, Jason pretends that he is still talking with Nina. He is afraid that his coworkers will laugh him. All his action is to protect his conceited heart again.

Jason is a big bank's chairman who has a handsome face. He is a very conceited man, so most people don't like him. He is deeply attracted by a beautiful girl, Nina. One day in the bank, "Nina, I love you so much. Could I invited you to see a movie?" "No! Never," Nina said. Nina didn't like Jason, but he didn't give up. He called her almost every day. While he was enjoying the fun of making phone calls, Nina was getting more and more annoyed. After a month, Jason left a message on her answering machine and voice mail, but Nina didn't call back. Jason still didn't give up. He had an idea that perhaps he could try her mobile phone, but he couldn't recall the number. Fortunately, one of his coworkers told him to look it up in the phone book. "Ring! Ring!" The phone was ringing. When Nina picked the receiver and heard Jason's voice, she was very angry and left the phone off the hook. Jason dialed again, but this time he got a wrong number. He continued and finally he got a right one. He was very happy. "Hi! Nina." Soon the phone was hung up by Nina. Jason pretended that he was still talking with Nina because he was afraid that his coworkers would laugh at him. What he did was to protect his conceited heart.

Last weekend Jason and Nina went swimming in the beach. When they took a walk in the beach, a spice girl passed them by. And Jason whistles for her. But this made Nina unhappy and she went away. The next day Jason left a message on Nina's answering machine and on her voice mail at work, but Nina hasn't called me back. When Nina came home, she receives Jason's messages and she doesn't want to go out with him any more. Nina wishes he'd leave her alone. As a result of Nina hasn't called him back, Jason tried to call her again this morning, but it was busy. Then he tried her mobile phone, but it wasn't switched on . What's her phone number? His friend doesn't have an idea and give him a phone book. Then hefound that he gets a wrong number. Finally, he remembers her phone number and calls her as soon as possible. While Nina hears his voice, she hangs down the phone quickly. Then Jason puts the phone down slowly and says to his friend "She says she loves me" with proud. Then his friend says he has something to do and has to go now. In fact, his friend has an appointment with Nina.

Last weekend Jason and Nina went swimming at the beach. When they took a walk along the beach, a slender and attractive girl passed by. Jason whistled to her, but this made Nina unhappy. She turned and went away. The next day Jason left a message on Nina's answering machine and on her voice mail at work, but Nina didn't call him back. When Nina came home, she received Jason's messages. She didn't want to go out with him any more. She hoped he'd leave her alone. Because Nina didn't call back, Jason tried to call her again, but the line was busy. Then he tried her mobile phone, but it wasn't switched on. What was her phone number? He couldn't recall it, so his friend gave him a phone book. He dialed a number, but he found he got a wrong one. Finally, he recalled it and called her immediately. As soon as Nina heard his voice, she hung up the phone. Jason was sad; however, he put the receiver down slowly and said to his friend with proud, "She said she loved me." His friend said he had something important to do and had to leave. In fact, he had a date with Nina.

With the development of the computer, the Internet is getting more and more popular with people. Through the net, people can even make friends. However, it is hard to make long-lasting friends because they didn't see each other before, and on top of that they may not be honest when they talk to each other. Jason and Nina knew each other through the Internet. One day, Jason arranged to meet Nina in a restaurant. This would be the first time they saw each other. As soon as Jason saw Nina, he fell in love with her, but Nina didn't like Jason because he was fat. During the meeting, she ate in a hurry in order to go home as soon as possible. She didn't want to see him again. However, in Jason's eyes, she was a beauty. Jason tried to call her from then on, but Nina avoided answering the telephone. Finally, she was so tired that she left the phone off the hook and no longer used the Internet to make friends.

Jason has a crush on Nina, but it is a pity because Nina has no feelings towards him and has a boyfriend. They met in a business transaction and just out of courtesy Nina gave her telephone number to Jason. He not only asked her to go out with him but also investigated her personal affairs, which made her feel like puking. He left many messages on Nina's answering machine and voice mail; of course she never called back. Jason was so depressed that he tried to fine out Nina's new phone number and called her; this made her even more angry, so she hung up on him and Jason knew that there wasn't any possibility between them anymore. Even though he was disappointed that Nina had no feelings for him, he smiled and pretended that Nina had just said she loved him.

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Jason is a fat and ugly man. One day Jason's friend introduce Jason to a pretty woman, Nina. Jason fell in love with Nina at first sight. Then Jason almost phoned Nina and invited her to go out everyday. Nina felt Jason was so annoying and finally Nina couldn't help but pretend to be not at home to get away with him. This made Jason so sad. At this time his friend laugh at him and he was so recalcitrant. Thus they wagered if Jason could make Nina be his girlfriend. In order to win, Jason called Nina every day. One time Jason phoned the wrong number and it's midnight that time. The old man scold at Jason very angrily. But Jason didn't give up. He did really liked Nina and he was not reconciled. After a long period of time, Jason's friend knew that Nina didn't answer Jason from beginning to end. He went to Jason's house and wanted to laugh at him. But Jason didn't admire that he lost. Therefore, they decided to phone Nina the last time to judge if Jason lost. Fortunately, Nina answered it this time. This made Jason and his friend surprised. When Nina found it's Jason, Nina left the phone off the hook. Jason was so disappointed, but he lied to his friend. He said, " She says she loves me." In spite of this friend doubted him but he still paid money to Jason. Although Jason didn't have a girlfriend, But at least, he gained the money.	Jason is a fat and ugly man. One day Jason's friend introduced him to a pretty woman, Nina. Jason fell in love with Nina at the first sight. Then Jason phoned Nina and invited her to go out almost every day. Nina found Jason was so annoying that she couldn't help but pretend not to be at home to get away from him. This made Jason so sad. At this time his friend laughed at him, calling him a loser. Jason was very angry. He bet his friend a large sum of money that he could win Nina's love. In order to win, Jason called Nina every day. One day, it was midnight and Jason had a wrong number. The old man who answered the phone shouted at Jason very angrily. However, Jason didn't give up. He really liked Nina. Several months later, Jason's friend knew that Nina didn't repay Jason's love to her. He went to Jason's house and wanted to ask for the money. But Jason didn't admit that he lost the bet. Therefore, they decided to call Nina the last time to see who was the winner. Fortunately, Nina answered it and this made Jason and his friend surprised. When Nina found it was Jason again, she hung up the phone immediately. Jason was so disappointed but he still lied to his friend. He said," She said she loved me." Although his friend doubted Jason, he still paid the money to him. Jason didn't win a girlfriend, but at least he gained the money.
Jason is a big bank's chairman who has a handsome face. He is very conceited man, so most people dosen't like him. He is deeply attracted by a miss, called Nina. One day in the bank, " Nina, I love you so much. Could I invite you to see a movie?" "No! Never the ever," Nina says. Nina doesn't like him, but Jason doesn't give up. From then on, Jason calls her every day, so that Nina is getting more and more angry. After a month, Jason leaves a message on the answering machine and on her voice mail for her again, but Nina still doesn't call back to her. Jason still doesn't give up, he has an idea that he can try her mobile phone. But he doesn't know her cell phone number. Fortunately, one of his coworker tells him to look up on the phone book. "Ring! Ring!" The phone is ringing. When Nina listens Jason's voice, she is very angry and turns off her phone. Jason looks up her room's phone number on the phone book again. First time he gets a wrong number, second time, he gets a right one. He is very happy. "Hi! Nina." Soon the phone is cutted by Nina. In the other hand, Jason pretends that he is still talking with Nina. He is afraid that his coworkers will laugh him. All his action is to protect his conceited heart again.	Jason is a big bank's chairman who has a handsome face. He is a very conceited man, so most people don't like him. He is deeply attracted by a beautiful girl, Nina. One day in the bank, "Nina, I love you so much. Could I invited you to see a movie?" "No! Never," Nina said. Nina didn't like Jason, but he didn't give up. He called her almost every day. While he was enjoying the fun of making phone calls, Nina was getting more and more annoyed. After a month, Jason left a message on her answering machine and voice mail, but Nina didn't call back. Jason still didn't give up. He had an idea that perhaps he could try her mobile phone, but he couldn't recall the number. Fortunately, one of his coworkers told him to look it up in the phone book. "Ring! Ring!" The phone was ringing. When Nina picked the receiver and heard Jason's voice, she was very angry and left the phone off the hook. Jason dialed again, but this time he got a wrong number. He continued and finally he got a right one. He was very happy. "Hi! Nina." Soon the phone was hung up by Nina. Jason pretended that he was still talking with Nina because he was afraid that his coworkers would laugh at him. What he did was to protect his conceited heart.
Last weekend Jason and Nina went swimming in the beach. When they took a walk in the beach, a spice girl passed them by. And Jason whistles for her. But this made Nina unhappy and she went away. The next day Jason left a message on Nina's answering machine and on her voice mail at work, but Nina hasn't called me back. When Nina came home, she receives Jason's messages and she doesn't want to go out with him any more. Nina wishes he'd leave her alone. As a result of Nina hasn't called him back, Jason tried to call her again this morning, but it was busy. Then he tried her mobile phone, but it wasn't switched on . What's her phone number? His friend doesn't have an idea and give him a phone book. Then hefound that he gets a wrong number. Finally, he remembers her phone number and calls her as soon as possible. While Nina hears his voice, she hangs down the phone quickly. Then Jason puts the phone down slowly and says to his friend "She says she loves me" with proud. Then his friend says he has something to do and has to go now. In fact, his friend has an appointment with Nina.	Last weekend Jason and Nina went swimming at the beach. When they took a walk along the beach, a slender and attractive girl passed by. Jason whistled to her, but this made Nina unhappy. She turned and went away. The next day Jason left a message on Nina's answering machine and on her voice mail at work, but Nina didn't call him back. When Nina came home, she received Jason's messages. She didn't want to go out with him any more. She hoped he'd leave her alone. Because Nina didn't call back, Jason tried to call her again, but the line was busy. Then he tried her mobile phone, but it wasn't switched on. What was her phone number? He couldn't recall it, so his friend gave him a phone book. He dialed a number, but he found he got a wrong one. Finally, he recalled it and called her immediately. As soon as Nina heard his voice, she hung up the phone. Jason was sad; however, he put the receiver down slowly and said to his friend with proud, "She said she loved me." His friend said he had something important to do and had to leave. In fact, he had a date with Nina.
With the development of the computer, the Internet is getting more and more popular with people. Through the net, people can even make friends. However, it is hard to make long-lasting friends because they didn't see each other before, and on top of that they may not be honest when they talk to each other. Jason and Nina knew each other through the Internet. One day, Jason arranged to meet Nina in a restaurant. This would be the first time they saw each other. As soon as Jason saw Nina, he fell in love with her, but Nina didn't like Jason because he was fat. During the meeting, she ate in a hurry in order to go home as soon as possible. She didn't want to see him again. However, in Jason's eyes, she was a beauty. Jason tried to call her from then on, but Nina avoided answering the telephone. Finally, she was so tired that she left the phone off the hook and no longer used the Internet to make friends.
Jason has a crush on Nina, but it is a pity because Nina has no feelings towards him and has a boyfriend. They met in a business transaction and just out of courtesy Nina gave her telephone number to Jason. He not only asked her to go out with him but also investigated her personal affairs, which made her feel like puking. He left many messages on Nina's answering machine and voice mail; of course she never called back. Jason was so depressed that he tried to fine out Nina's new phone number and called her; this made her even more angry, so she hung up on him and Jason knew that there wasn't any possibility between them anymore. Even though he was disappointed that Nina had no feelings for him, he smiled and pretended that Nina had just said she loved him.

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